I pushed her down my balcony
A pang of guilt in my throat.
She, I know not, why turned enemy,
When, on each other, we used to dote.
I had a bitter mind for sure,
Or maybe, our bond went sour,
The past few months had passed away
In cat fights, arguments, wars.
We blamed each other for the lives we led,
I knew-she had spoiled my life.
She said her life was a complete disaster,
And I was the reason for her strife.
It was amusing, how God had played,
With me, her and us.
The irony of our lives, being...
We had nothing more than each other, left.
Too bad then, that I had to take a stand,
Too bad then, that i wanted a life without her...
Too bad then, that i wasn't ready to listen
But why, we were sisters.
Soul mates, supposedly.
But unfortunate, that she cheated on me..
And of course, the money of the bank robbery
Alas! Only she knew where it was!
P.S: It's the first time...poetry on my blog...and that too in blank verse. If you do not approve of it (of which I'm certain), please let me know. This will not be repeated ever again.
16 comments:
hmmm.Nice one.I hate to speak anything negative about it,still
some of my observations i would like to share
Emotions depicted,like your other p osts are deep and realistic. This makes this piece a worth read.
You could have fit in some rhyming words i feel.
The ending,was disappointing,especially because the starting was so good.
Ofcourse you don't have to go by what i say, its just that some crap occurred to my mind,and i shared it.
You will make a great poetess.
Keep writing
God bless you :-)
Why would you care if people dont approve of it?
Its nice, though!
Different Ishtyle!
:P
I liked it.
And the theme is interesting too!!
I hope you find the money soon though :P And share it with me :)
nice..just wierd :P
never read poetry by you,you see..
advice : don't make pallavi read it! :P :P
and also comment on my blog you fool! :(
tshhar..there's no word as poetess..its just one word..poet! be it male or female..!! :)
plz don't hate me for that tho! :P
@Radhika
:O
Oh Really,no word like that.
Well,being a creative writer,atleast grant me that much freedom to twist and alter some words :P
And naa...why should i hate you for that...am not that vengeful
:D
BTW- vengeful word exists in the dictionary na??
Its DIFFERENT!
Though i didn't love it like all your other articles/poems but then it is difficult to maintain that kind of standard all the time,u know:P
I also expected a better ending because it just came out of nowhere.Rather abrupt i think.
OMG! i can't believe that i am actually criticising YOUR work!
I give u full liberty to do so too,u know:-)
ah, I was expecting a bleak response. So all my readers, chill, I know I wont write such stuff again. It's not my type and style at all. i just felt like it on one weird day!
tshhar: Thanx for all that. And I wrote it in 'blank' verse, so obviously, no rhyming!!
disha: Like I wouldnt have shared the money, had you not said it!! mwah lady!
radhika: Let me let you in something- Pallavi is the inspiration!!! I had a horrible fight with her!
And I will comment on ur blog, chill...
akanksha: My gosh! Meri billi mujhko meow?? khair, I dont mind it, after all, it's gonna be nice for me!!
*sigh*
It was amusing, how God had played,
With me, her and us.
The irony of our lives, being...
We had nothing more than each other, left.
<3ed this^ esp.=)
A piece if advice:Listen to people but do what you want to.:)
prerna: Ur the first one to appreciate it!! (atleast a part of i..lol)
And yes, I know what you mean! Dont worry, I am the last person to be told that!!
I always follow no one but myself...and as far as I know myself, i dont think I will write such type again...
thik thik hai okay,yes vengeful does exist in the dictionary *sigh*
tsshar n radhika; vengeful is a word, and poetess used to be one long time ago, if I have my english history set right...
and I would love it if I would be included in this un-interesting convo of yours, to make it more interesting...
lol...forget it, im just perpetually bored
@Abhilasha
Welcome to the discussion.I was wondering, i had read the word poetess many a times. And why do you think you wont write such things again.You got that spark explore it.
@Radhika
Thanks
:-)
God bless you all
tsshar: oh thank you.
and yes, it was a word. And you know something, I just have a feeling that this kind of writing is not my style. If I feel like it again, obviously I'll do it.
waise i love the title :)
and if you did have a horrible fite with her,i just know u won't be pushing her down ur balcony! :p
and i did appreciate ur poem.. :| preru was not the first one! :(
it's a really nice poem...this is the first poem of yours that i read and its pretty neat!
@ prerna : lwt!
you, out of all the people, saying
"A piece if advice:Listen to people but do what you want to.:)"
*sigh*
radhika: you do like the title?? and hey, i didnt really realise your appreciation!!! :P
kika : awww...thank you!! I kno, I havent really posted any poems on my blog...
:-)
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